In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people

Deforestation has

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contributed to the global warming that has been impacting the whole world. A reason for that ought to be that decades ago

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when the currently big cities

people

actually live in at the present were just

being build

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this

practice took place in order to construct new homes for

people

live

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in. In another hand, with the

augmantation

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augmentation

of population, the already existing spaces available for housing are not

enought

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enough

anymore, which demands a higher wood exploration than before. Following those steps, a concern about the

countryside

preservation has been claimed for someone's attention.

Firstly

, it's

crutial

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crucial

that individuals must question themselves if the planet is in need of more

people

habitating

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orbit or

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care of the ones that already

exists

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, living in it. As a fact, human beings

depends

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the

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nature in order to survive. But

instead

of trying to take care of their resources, they keep on

exploiring

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exploring

exploiting

all the

faund

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fauna

found

and flora with any caution. In

such

a way, the main cities

people

actually live in nowadays were probably already a forest once, and now it mostly is a

center

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of pollution. For another

perspection

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perspective

, starting to

degradate

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degrade

the

countryside

, in order to build new homes there would only postpone and make the existing problems even worse. At

this

point of view, some civilizations are regulating new public policies for the quantities of children a couple can have,

such

as happens in China.

This

country population increased in

such

a way that their efforts are not enough

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mainten

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maintain

all their individuals living in even in basic conditions.

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people

have more than one child, no mattering if it is a boy or a girl. Exploring the

countryside

would not solve the

climatics

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climatic

climates

and social problems, but would only

expands

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it and make it worse. In

this

way, it is important to protect

the

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nature in its

entiretly

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entirety

entirely

, even because building new homes for

people

in the

countryside

area would just make the problems for those who

lives

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in the city more complicated than it already is.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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