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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
Deforestation has
certain
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 contributed to the global warming that has been impacting the whole world. A reason for that ought to be that decades ago
,
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 when the currently big cities
people
 actually live in at the present were just
being build
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,
this
 practice took place in order to construct new homes for
people
live
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 in. In another hand, with the
augmantation
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augmentation
 of population, the already existing spaces available for housing are not
enought
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enough
 anymore, which demands a higher wood exploration than before. Following those steps, a concern about the
countryside
 preservation has been claimed for someone's attention.
Firstly
, it's
crutial
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crucial
 that individuals must question themselves if the planet is in need of more
people
habitating
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habituating
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 orbit or
take
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 care of the ones that already
exists
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, living in it. As a fact, human beings
depends
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 on
the
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nature in order to survive. But
instead
 of trying to take care of their resources, they keep on
exploiring
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exploring
exploiting
 all the
faund
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fauna
found
 and flora with any caution. In
such
 a way, the main cities
people
 actually live in nowadays were probably already a forest once, and now it mostly is a
center
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 of pollution. For another
perspection
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perspective
, starting to
degradate
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degrade
 the
countryside
, in order to build new homes there would only postpone and make the existing problems even worse. At
this
 point of view, some civilizations are regulating new public policies for the quantities of children a couple can have,
such
 as happens in China.
This
 country population increased in
such
 a way that their efforts are not enough
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mainten
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maintain
 all their individuals living in even in basic conditions.
Thus
, it became prohibited
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people
 have more than one child, no mattering if it is a boy or a girl. Exploring the
countryside
 would not solve the
climatics
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climatic
climates
 and social problems, but would only
expands
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 it and make it worse. In
this
 way, it is important to protect
the
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nature in its
entiretly
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entirety
entirely
, even because building new homes for
people
 in the
countryside
 area would just make the problems for those who
lives
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 in the city more complicated than it already is.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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