Governments should spend money on rails rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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Traffic
congestion has been exacerbated not only
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urban areas but
also
on intercity highway
routs
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. While
this
makes the authorities think
whether
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allocating more budget on road infrastructure can alleviate
traffic
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, I feel advocating the expenditure of money on
railway
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system is of paramount importance. The
first
point to consider is that a large investment in road infrastructure can be particularly potent in facilitating commuters' daily travel and truck freight.
In other words
, roadway widening, increasing lanes and asphalt paving, to name but a few, can make a huge difference in saving time and improving
safety
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of individuals and larger vehicles.
Although
this
justification
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seems understandable, road expansion and improvement do not necessarily decrease lengthy tailback, the volume of freight
traffic
or even
traffic
gridlock, especially during rush hour. Since
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were governments to
pay
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more attention to roads than rails, people would be more encouraged to use their private cars and single-occupancy vehicles which in turn may cause more
traffic
and accidents. Perhaps, a factor
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justifies prioritizing trains and setting aside money for ameliorating
railway
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the railway
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system is preserving the environment. Nowadays, the earth has encountered serious environmental issues, including air pollution due to burning more fossil fuels compared to the past.
Hopefully
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the greenhouse effect of
railway
transport is much smaller than cars, buses and trucks because most trains are electric, and they emit less carbon dioxide into the atmosphere.
Furthermore
, the less carbon dioxide people breathe, the
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respiratory or cardiovascular diseases they will experience in the long run. Equally important is the fact that rail travel and transport helps communities financially.
That is
, Train's fare is economical and cost-effective, especially for
shorter
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a shorter
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distance
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. In conclusion, I subscribe to the view that governments should not spend a larger amount of money on roads owing to environmental and financial benefits offered by developing
railway
system.
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