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Nowadays people around the world are spending more money on consumer goods like TVs and microwave ovens. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In recent years, with the development of new technologies, most
people
 tend to purchase more appliances. At the same
time
,
however
, there is some uncertainty about the merits and demerits of
this
 situation. In
this
 essay, I will review both sides of the debate to seek a conclusion.
To begin
 with, there is undeniable that modern household appliances gradually become
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 indispensable part of
the
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modern
life
, since
it
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they
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 can improve and enrich
people
's
life
.
For example
, TV programs with the internet provide varieties of programs which break the limit of
time
 and space, highly expanding
people
's horizons and
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 peoples' mantle health as well.
In addition
, the
life
 involved in technological devices would be
time
-saving as to the microwave ovens, which significantly reduced the cooking
time
 and helped
people
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 from the repetitive daily chores. In
this
 way,
people
 can have some spare
time
 to do more meaningful stuff
such
 as being voluntary, doing some researches.
Consequently
, the money
people
 spend on innovation devices is valuable since modern
technology
 could offer more job opportunities and accelerate economic development.
On the other hand
,
however
, some
people
 are probably over-consumed due to the fact that there
is
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 all-around advertisements
which
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 might mislead consumption and
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irrational consumption can result in a large amount
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 issues
such
 as resource wasting and environmental pollution.
Moreover
, over depending on new
technology
 may make
people
 less thinking, just pressing a button to achieve the goal, affecting
people
's ability to explore simultaneously.
Furthermore
, using domestic
technology
 reduces precious family
time
 to some extent since
people
 focus more on efficiency while ignoring spending
time
 together to do some housework, which can be harmful to maintaining the family's relationship. To summarize, there is no doubt that the whole world benefits from
technology
 goods which convenience
life
 and provides jobs, thereby improving the standard of living. At the same
time
,
however
, the penetration of high-tech in
life
 may affect
people
's consumption view, leading to recourse wasting and environmental issues. In the final analysis,
therefore
, one can only conclude that it is the main trend to live with
technology
. Meanwhile,
people
 should consume rationally based on what they do need.
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