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the proportion of Japan and Malaysia in average household spending in 2010.

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The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of
Japan
 and
Malaysia
 in average household spending in 2010. The general overview here is that
Japan
 spent most on Other goods and services, while the highest amount of
Malaysia
 was spent on Housing in the given year. According to the charts,it can be seen that
Japan
 spent about 29% on the Other good and services as composed to
Malaysia
 at 26%.
Moreover
, in
Japan
, expenditure on transport(20%)was over double that the
Malaysia
, which was only 10%.
On the contrary
,
Malaysia
 expenditure was higher on Housing than
Japan
 (around 34% and 21% respectively).
In addition
, accounting for 27% was spent by
Malaysia
 on Food which was slightly more than
Japan
 who spent exactly 24%.
However
.Neither of the countries spent the least on Health care which accounted for a mere 6
%
of expenditure in
Japan
 but only 3% in
Malaysia
 over the observed year.
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