Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to change our character traits. To what extent do you agree?

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Our personality is an amalgamation of

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of variables,

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as genes, environment, parenting, society etc.

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, to say that nothing can be done to alter our character traits will be inaccurate. Research has shown that

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personalities

can be changed but

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is a

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process and

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, requires patience. To commence with, environment and society

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a fundamental part in ones' life. An

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adolescent

child's brain picks a lot of cues from the surroundings.

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, if a youngster is in

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environment

which involves

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of outdoor activities

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than focusing on indoor activities, it will lead child's nature to be more involved in sports and will help in developing social skills. Whereas, a kid with more indoor involvement will be more connected to individual things

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as video games and smartphones. Another pivotal pillar

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favours the aforementioned statement is that parents have a saliant role in an adult's character traits. How the family runs have an impact on

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personality.

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, if a teenager

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in a violent group with the parents being too strict

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the individual will react in a similar fashion with outer society. The person will tend to be

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, conscious and protective.

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states that change is a possibility and to achieve it tiny steps are required. Starting from changing a simple behavioural instinct which leads to a bigger change. Studies

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show that to acquire

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small change 21 days are required. After a

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it inculcates within your habits. Despite being the supporter of the notion that personalities can be changed, I do believe that genes

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have a preponderant role in

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character traits. But, believing that a

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characteristic

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only depends on genes will be false and misleading.

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, I conclude that personalities are not predetermined prior to our birth,

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are determined by how a person

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life.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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