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In recent years, the family structure and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive and negative

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In the modern era,the household formation and
responsibilities
 of the people involved have changed.
This
 is due to hard economic times and the
adaptaion
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adaptation
 to western culture.In my opinion,
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 believe the
changes
 have
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negative impulses on the upcoming generation. The brood
changes
 have increased over the years.
Firstly
,the inflation rate of different essential commodities has increased the need for the mothers to go out and look for basic needs,
consequently
,leaving the parental
responsibilities
 to
househelps
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house helps
households
 who will not be able to teach good morals to children.Another issue,fathers have left the
responsibilities
 of taking charge of the menage
instead
 of chasing after the basic needs too.
Secondly
,copping the different lifestyle and abandoning the routine culture has led to families roles in the community to lose meaning.
For instance
,the annual get-together of brood members has declined to owe the hard economic times.
Thus
,impacts of economic challenges and copping
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 cultures have contributed immensely to the deterioration of family formation.
On the other hand
,
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 the increase in
change
 of technology advancement and globalization have made
change
 inevitable.To illustrate
this
,family members in urban centres are more prone to the
changes
thus
 deforming their bond and structure in the family.
Moreover
,the issues of internet connectivity in several homes have made it easy for members to adapt to what is in existence.There is an adage that says "
change
 with the changing times".
Therefore
,a school of thought feels that the
change
 is good for the current modern era. To conclude, the family structure should not be prone to the current
changes
 that are happening because they will make the
next
 generation miss out on important
responsibilities
 and
also
 lose the cultural relevance of the household.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual-income
  • gender roles
  • single-parent households
  • divorce rates
  • same-sex parents
  • multigenerational
  • family dynamics
  • aging population
  • communication technology
  • child-rearing approaches
  • work-life balance
  • remote working
  • family structure
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