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Some people suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

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The pie charts provide data regarding the proportion of global forest and
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 the ratio of
timber
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 in five various continents. Looking at the graphs, it is immediately obvious that
Africa
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 accounted for the highest percentage of world forest in spite of the percentage of
timber
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 the lowest.
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, the proportion of
timber
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 in
Africa
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 was the lowest. From the
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 we can see
twenty seven
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percent
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 of
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 forest in
Africa
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, compared to 25% of North American.
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, the figures for South America and Europe stood at 16% and 18% respectively, while the level for that of Asia was the lowest, at 14%. Moving on to the
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 pie chart, North America accounted for the highest proportion of
timber
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, with 30%.
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, eighteen
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 of
timber
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 in Asia, which definitely doubled the volume of
Africa
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.
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, the figures for South America and Europe stood at 23% and 20% respectively.
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