In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

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It’s Completely clear that the government tries to avoid
people
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from having a
lot
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fast
food
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which is pretty unhealthy and leads to health problems. I strongly agree with
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opinion and to
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it should be something to avoid
people
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from eating them too much.
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of all, I believe that
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by enforcing a new rule and increasing the higher
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on fast
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can make any fast
food
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harder for
people
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.
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they mostly can achieve
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goal to avoid
people
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from getting health
problem
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and have
more
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healthy lifestyle.
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if the government enforce the rule of higher
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on fast
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,
people
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will be less eager to eat fast
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Since
people
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have financial problems and some
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may be
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tremendous pressure leads to
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these
foods
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less. That’s why it can be
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option to do to make
people
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eat less
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foods
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.
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, increasing higher
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on
these kind
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this kind
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of
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leads to
sell
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selling
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fast
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less by restaurants.
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,
resturants
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restaurants
won’t be able to sell Fast
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a lot and the number of customers will decrease.
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, when
fast
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fast-food
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food
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restaurants don’t sell And have
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Customers
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sufficiently they won’t be able to
carry-on
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carry on
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and receive sufficient profits.
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, it leads to
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a change in their occupation. Fast
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restaurants will decrease or try to have
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apply
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healthy
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instead
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of unhealthy and poor quality
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. To conclude, I strongly believe that
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a Higher
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tax
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on fast
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completely
affect
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on eating a lot by
people
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who are suffering from
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health
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problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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