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You are going on a month training programme to the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events' organiser. Write a letter to the Training Organiser. In your letter • expressing your interest in the role • requesting more information about it • explaining what experience you have

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 letter to inform you that I can volunteer for organizing the social events during my one month program. I have enrolled for one month's immigration's training course and I saw the online notice board that you want someone to arrange the social events during
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. I would like to extend my help to do so as I have
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apply

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experience
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 even management for 3 years and I can use my skills to perform the task.
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, I need to know what kind of events would it be and how many people we have to take care of?
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 if you can tell me whether it would be in an open area or in the community hall and whether is it going to be the day event or the night one? I am glad to offer my help and use my knowledge as
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 have been doing
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part time
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part-time

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past
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the past

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 six years with my cousin. I hope to hear soon from you. Thank You. Yours Sincerely,
Brijal
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Bridal
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Desai

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