People in big cities are facing many health challenges due to a high level of air pollution. What causes air pollution in big cities? Can you suggest some ways to deal with this situation?

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Pollution

has become a big

problem

across the world and

need

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to be prevented.

people

are facing many

health

challenges all around the earth because of

high

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the high

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level

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air

pollution

. In

this

essay

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I will explain the causes of

air

pollutin

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pollution

and I will suggest

possible

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solution

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solutions

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solve

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slove

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the

problem

. A good reason why

air

pollution

is increasing is nothing but

overuse

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of vehicles.

People

are using more personal vehicle to go everywhere rather than public transport, so there are too much

carbone

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carbon

monoxide in the

air

and it is very dangerous for

health

Furthermore

, Big cities have many industries who emit harmful gases in the

air

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are directed infected by them and they may have

lung

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a lung

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problem

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Therefore

, it can say

air

pollution

challenging

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issue because of factories and

vehicle

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. Another point to consider that rising

air

pollutin

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pollution

is that big cities have taken a

palce

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place

of trees.

For instance

, many tall buildings in urban areas are built by

deforestartion

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deforestation

, so they do not have any factor to protect the

pollution

. In

adition

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addition

people

can not

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get fresh

air

and are affected by many

health

issues.

On the other hand

, there are numerous ways to stop it.

Firstly

government

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the government

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should encourage

people

to use public transport

instead

of their own vehicle.

Secondly

, the owners of a big industry should have

proper

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system to

relief

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the detrimental

gasese

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gases

Finally

, it is

need

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to plant more trees around the city. In conclusion,

air

polution

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pollution

is challenging for big cities as it has many

health

problem

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but it can be solved.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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People in big cities are facing many health challenges due to a high level of air pollution. What causes air pollution in big cities? Can you suggest some ways to deal with this situation?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe that they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Describe a time when you were extremely happy. What happened?

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