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The best way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organization. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some advocate that working for a company with multinational background is the best way to understand
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cultures
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the cultures
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 of other nations. I do not agree with
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 statement. Working for
a multinational companies
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multinational companies
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 is beneficial to those who
wants
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 to understand other
cultures
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.
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 is because employees will have opportunities to take business trips , travelling to other countries, which means that employees will be able to experience local life.
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, staff of organisations with multinational
background
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backgrounds
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 employ staff from all over the world.
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 provides employees with
chance
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 to work with and communicate with those who come from foreign countries. Through daily conversations and interactions,
one
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 will be able to acquire knowledge of a different nation.
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, I strongly believe that there are many other ways for
one
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 to understand foreign
cultures
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.
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 of all, reading books is a practical method to study foreign culture.
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,
one
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 can read history books and travel
guide
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 about a particular country that he or she is into;
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, he or she will get access to introduction or depiction of local traditions. Another constructive alternative is to enjoy movies and tv programmes produced by specific countries. A good example is American soap operas, whose plots are usually set based on American daily lives and
cultures
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;
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, by watching movies and TV dramas produced in
USA
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the USA
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,
one
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 can
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 understand American
cultures
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,
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, how they greet each other, and how they celebrate festivals,
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 as Christmas, and Thanksgiving. In conclusion, though being an employee in a multicultural organisation makes understanding foreign
cultures
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 possible, I believe that alternatives,
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, reading books and watching foreign movies and TV shows, are
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 helpful and practical.
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