Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes . Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that getting a

degree

from

university

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a university

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is the best way to guarantee a good

job

,others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience

instead

.Discuss

both

sides and give your opinion. Since the industrial

revolution

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,revolution

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the kind of

jobs

has multiplied and

as a result

of

this

many

jobs

needed

a specific experts

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a specific expert

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.Some say that having a higher

degree

gives more

advantage

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advantages

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to

get

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getting

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a good

job

,whereas others believe that

jobs

are not required to study about.I believe that universities are more important for having a good

job

.

This

essay will discuss

both

sides from my point of view.

Initially

,universities present more educational resources related to fields.That means

,

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those who study in

university

will become highly knowledgeable after graduation .

For instance

,I studied at a

university

for four years

then

I became a professional about my

job

,

that

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which

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gives me more chance of finding a

job

.

Furthermore

,connecting with networks is more important while searching for a recent

job

which

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in which

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universities supply many networks.

In other words

,while studying in a

university

you

more

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are more

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likely to connect with many networks that will make

easier

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it easier

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to find a proper

job

.

On the other hand

,some sort of

jobs

do

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does

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not require a

degree

for

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apply

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.

This

means

,

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those who want to work in some basic

jobs

would probably find it easily.Working in a farm company

for example

,

firstly

do not need any knowledge to pick up an apple,but after

while

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can get

a knowledge

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knowledge

a piece of knowledge

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about farming and you probably become a farmer.

Moreover

,studying in a field is so expensive and you have to spend more

money

to get a

degree

.

Instead

of

study

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studying

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for a long time and

spend

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spending

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a

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big amount

money

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of money

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in order to find a good

job

,you may start an

amatour

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amateur

in a subject

firstly

then

get

an

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apply

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experience

about

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of

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that

job

.As a consequence,you

both

gain

money

and have knowledge without going to

university

. To sum up,

although

starting for a

job

without being educated gives you a chance to become a professional,many say that studying at

university

for a specific field put you one foot than others while you search for a

job

.In my point of view,education is more important for

both

finding a better

job

and

gain

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gaining

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more

money

.