The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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technological
development has been made an impact on each and every aspect of
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society. Among many of those, criminal acts show a huge co-relation with evolving technology.
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there is
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enough
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evidence
to decide whether it is towards the positive side or the negative side. On the one hand,
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of several
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reduced plenty of
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.
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of CCTV cameras
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decreased
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shoplifting
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shop lifting
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shoplifting
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and robberies. Meantime, introducing online
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data bases
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for police departments
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also
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a key milestone in
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history.
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has given enough space for the law enforcement authorities to analyze data and predict
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crime patterns.
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, it has become an unrealistic task for a criminal to hide his
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identity
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between each country's
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data bases
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.
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, there are some points that have been making a positive impact on
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rate.
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, the online market of weapons and drugs has opened doors to the
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for anybody with money and
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the internet
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.
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, anyone can find
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of training lessons for any weapon or drug, even
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Youtube.
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, any drug dealer or weapon dealer can reach the kids via Facebook,
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Instagram
or any other social media platform despite the physical barriers. For
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of teenagers
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in anti-social activities has drastically increased during
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last
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the last
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few years. In my point of view, there are both
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plus
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and minus effects on crime rate due to technical advancement. Both the police and the criminals make use of it for their own
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benefit
benefits
against each other.
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