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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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In
this
 day and age, due to cutting-edge technology, farming has been advanced.
However
, despite these advancements, many people are highly likely to suffer from starvation and famine in each corner of the globe. There are several
reasons
 behind
this
 phenomenon.
This
 essay will discuss the main
reasons
 for
this
 impediment as well as the possible solutions to resolve it
accordingly
. The
first
 underlying justification is an unequal distribution of foodstuffs throughout the world. To put it another way, most of the major
food
 factories which are used modern technology are located in developed countries and the other countries due to the lack of facilities can not have well-equipped factories and advanced agriculture in
this
 regard. As a direct result, some people are faced with difficulty in providing
food
.
Moreover
, the cost of
food
 transportation is relatively high and it is not affordable for not only the government but
also
 the private sector of
food
 distribution to share out foodstuffs around the world. An obvious example is Africans who are living in the Africa continent. They can not afford to supply
food
 due to the mentioned
reasons
 as well as they are suffering from
food
 scarcity.
Nevertheless
, there are potential solutions that have helped in minimising
this
 problem.
First
 of all, the government should be directly or indirectly supervise
food
 prices. Simply put, the authorities must curb the increase in
food
 prices till everyone to be able to purchase foodstuffs.
Secondly
, the establishment of new branches in far-flung corners of the globe by the main
food
 industrial units should be taken into account in
this
 regard.
Such
 steps can reduce the number of people who are still hungry. In conclusion, some deficiencies
such
 as the high-priced cost of
food
 hauling and improper infrastructures of
food
 providing in some countries are the most imperative
reasons
 for starvation.
However
, by doing some activities including government control on foods cost as well as expanding
food
 production industry around the world can proper solutions for
this
 problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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