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In Spite Of The Advances Made In Agriculture, Many People Still Go Hungry

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Although
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 the
world
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 has been witnessed a great advancement in
agriculture
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the agriculture
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 industry, there are still
nemorous
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numerous
 people all over the
world
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 who are hungry. There are some reasons for that, whereas some action which can be done. The two main reasons for hunger are population boom and
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overconsumption
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over consumption
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overconsumption
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.
First
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, it is true that agriculture
have
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 achieved great advances, yet it is not enough to provide
food
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 for everyone; and even if it was, the number of countries accessing
these achievement
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are
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 not noticeable.
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,
everyday
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every day
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 a large amount of
food
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 is thrown out by people and restaurants all over the
world
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.
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, almost every restaurant in prosperous
neighborhoods
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neighbourhoods
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 cooks
food
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 more than its
nesessity
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necessity
 which can result in more throwing out
food
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.
However
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, there are some potential measurements
which
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that
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 can be done to tackle
above
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the above
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. Education, with
long- term
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long-term
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 impacts
in
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 both sides, is the
first
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 one. It can control the birth rates in developing and poor countries;
also
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 can decrease over-consumption in the
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 generation.
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,
in
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developed countries, in which
food
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 is produced more than needed, should help undeveloped ones, with the shortage of
food
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. In
this
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 way, the more proportion of
world
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 could have at least one meal a day. In conclusion, as
the
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agriculture
have
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 many advances, because of the more increasing population level and
food
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 throwing away, the scarcity of
food
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 still
remain
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remains
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 a global issue. Some action should be done immediately,
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otherwise
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 it becomes more serious in
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 decades. Samin Assaran/AC

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