Some people think that students who don’t take a break in studies between the high school and the university are at disadvantage compared to students who travel and work after high school before further continuing their education. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, in our competitive world, to succeed, knowledge from
school
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and
university
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is not enough.
Therefore
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,
students
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who study from
school
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to
university
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get fewer benefits and contribute less too, compared to those
students
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who travel or work and get
experience
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and
skills
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before going high. There are two following reasons to support my opinion. I refer to the
group
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of people who study from
school
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to
university
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as ‘
group
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A’ and the other
group
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– as ‘
group
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B’.
Firstly
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, at
school
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and
university
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, what
group
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A gain is almost entirely
theory
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,
theory
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and
theory
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. Of course, the
theory
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is very necessary,
however
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, you can’t do everything with just
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. You must have practical
experience
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.
This
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is what
group
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A lack very much.
Although
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in the
third
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or fourth year at
university
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,
group
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A can be apprentices in some
companies
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, to help them approach their future jobs, they aren’t trained well because of the short time spent working. And the real job is still very strange to them. After graduating, without
experience
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,
group
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A
students
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can’t accomplish their work perfectly.
On the other hand
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, it takes them time and money to keep up with other experienced
students
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and they may be scorned.
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,
group
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A
students
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can contribute less than
group
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B who have the two most important things:
skills
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and
experience
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.
Secondly
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, as
group
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A
students
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are contributing less, they surely get less benefit.
Moreover
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, many
companies
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which employ people in
group
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A have to train them from the ground up. These
companies
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take
this
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cost from
group
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A’s salary to reduce the risk of their employees leaving to other
companies
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after being trained. So, fewer benefits are unavoidable and certain, Whereas
group
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B members are more loyal and effective workers. They
also
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have useful
experience
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and
skills
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.
Besides
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, their education is the same as or even higher than that of
group
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A.
As a result
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,
group
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B gets more benefits absolutely. In conclusion, I think a student should travel or work before going to
university
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. That way, not only will they have basic knowledge but
also
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skills
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and
experience
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which are useful for them to get a good job and have a brilliant future.
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