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he producing energy from six various sources in a country between 1985 and 2003.

the given pic charts illustrate the information about the producing
energy
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 from six various sources in a country between 1985 and 2003. The general overview here is that the majority of
energy
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 in
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 country was produced from oil over the period. According to the charts, it can be seen that in 1985 the highest amount of power was produced from oil. There was a significant change in 2003,
this
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 number experienced a remarkable drop of 14% to 39%.
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, the number of natural gas turned out
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 rose gradually by 10% to 33% 22 years later.
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, the figure of force created from cola and nuclear were
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 slightly increase to 13% and 17% respectively after passing 22 years.
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, the amount of the other renewable sources turned out
energy
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, rising from 1% in 1985 to 4% in 2003.
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, it is interesting to note that there was a period of stability of 4% in a power created from hydrogen over the period observed

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