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Many cities have areas where the only cars are taxis and buses. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Some
people
 might say that banning private
cars
 from going to the city centre is a potential benefit. I agree with the veracity of
this
 view and
this
 essay will tackle some reasons for
this
 situation. First and foremost, by applying
this
 action, there might be
less
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people
 using their own
cars
, which somewhat could reduce their carbon footprint, resulting in a decrease in the level of air pollution. As the more
people
 choose to use public transport, the less carbon dioxide is emitted from a number of private
cars
In addition
, each individual can benefit from sitting on a taxi or bus.
Instead
 of concentrating on driving their
cars
,
people
 are able to enjoy the scenery or have a rest after a stressful day. They
also
 do not need to worry about traffic accidents
as well as
 the rules they have to obey.
However
, some
argued
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 that
while
traveling
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travelling
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 on public transport,
people
 might have a higher risk of infectious diseases. It is true that if a person, who does not know they have been infected, coughs and sneezes in front of other
people
’s faces, others easily have that disease.
On the contrary
,
people
 have been raised awareness about some types of diseases and hygiene measures could be introduced and applied for buses and taxis,
then
this
 will probably be safe for
travelers
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. In conclusion, the decrease in the number of
cars
 tends to be a positive development as
this
 will help improve the traffic system
better
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, and I believe
this
 rule is one of the great inventions
in
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 human beings.
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