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It’s time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye.To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

#it’s #time #ban #media #life #people #world #politics #self-image #spread #disinformation #experiment #goodbye
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 has deeply infiltrated everyone’s life. It is shown from politics to self-image to the propagation of disinformation, it has been demonstrated that it has made
people
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's lives worse all over the
world
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. In my point of view, I partly agree with the given statement for the following reasons. In terms of positive development, there are some benefits that social
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 brings to
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’s lives.
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, social
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 has now become a means of communication.
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 facilitate communication in modern times as nowadays
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 can globally connect with old friends and relatives or with others who share common interests.
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, Facebook is currently providing service for 2.4 billion
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 who can choose to connect and interact with anyone they want, regardless of where they are.
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, study sessions are frequently happening on social networking websites through live streaming services, especially during the COVID-19 pandemic.
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, learners around the
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 now can have free access to online classes on
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 sites.
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, the negative development of social
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 is much more concerning. As these sites are becoming more and more dominant and attract large numbers of new
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 every day,
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 can fall prey to online communication abuse,
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 as online bullying and harassment.
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, social networking websites can become a toxic environment where
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 can be verbally assaulted because there are only a few rules, most of which are spoken rules rather than established guidelines, that restrict hateful or abusive content.
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, overuse of social
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 can lead to
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 downplaying the importance of the reality of everyday life. Nowadays, many young and reclusive
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 prefer living in a virtual
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 on social sites
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 engaging in real-life relationships.
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 may have serious mental effects,
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 as increased stress, anxiety and loneliness. To sum up, the invention of social
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 has made real effects on
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 all over the
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 recently. I supposed that
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 social
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 itself has brought the
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 closer and made lives easier,
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 should not rely on it and let it control their own life.
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