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There are many people who go to live in different countries. To what extent should people be allowed to move freely between countries and live where they choose? What are the benefits and drawbacks of this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The pie charts given illustrate the percentage of water consumed in three sectors in six different regions over the globe. Overall, the majority of proportion in four areas goes for agriculture, while in the other two
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 belongs to the industry. Central
Asia
, Africa, South East
Asia
 and South
America
 all have almost
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 same pattern in all three
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 of water use. Agriculture accounts for 88% in Central
Asia
.
This
 is followed by Africa, South East
Asia
 and South
America
 for 84%, 81% and 71% respectively. Despite
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South
America
 which
use
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 10% in industry, and almost twice of that in residential part, the other three have
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 equal percentage in both domestic and industrial uses, ranging between 7% and 12%.
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 has a reverse pattern in Europe and North
America
. The industry is responsible for about half of the water consumption, while
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 proportion goes for agriculture, ranging between 32% and 39%. Households are the lowest consumer, at 15% in Europe and 13% in North
America
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