Large companies use sport events to promote their products. Some people think this has a negative impact on sports. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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common for major

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companies to advertise their products during sports occasions.

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some people claim that

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events to promote unharmful goods and produce.

Sport

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and attracting millions of attendees , either in person or via the television, and recently, on the computer's or tables' screen ,

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many businesses take the opportunity to show their products to a large number of people who are considered

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celebrities, and some football

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players

might hold the name of an airline company or an energy drink on their T-shirts.

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way of advertising might bring about any undesirable effects on the

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

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Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

292 words

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Large companies use sport events to promote their products. Some people think this has a negative impact on sports. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

“By definition, charity is generosity in offering money, food, and help to the needy. To some people, such kindness should be boundless, others argue for a limit to it.” Which opinion do you support? In about 300 words, present your arguments.

Advances in health and biology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better time to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Doctors recommend that older people should get regular exercise. However many older people do not take enough exercise. What could be the reason for this? What can be done to encourage them to take exercise?