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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food Do you agree or disagree?

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There's a widely common problem nowadays
that is
 related to overeating junk
food
 and leads to some health issues. It is argued that government has to react and increase a tax on
this
 type of meal.
This
 essay will agree with
this
 statement and support some strong arguments and examples.
Firstly
, consumption fast
food
such
 as hamburgers, french fries, sweet drinks usually don't contain enough nutrition, vitamins and minerals and give people an enormous amount of sugar, salt and fat exceeding their daily need.
Therefore
, lack of essential elements might lead to several critical conditions and diseases as diabetes, hypertension, anaemia, etc. A clinical trial based on Cambridge University in 2015 found a direct correlation between an unhealthy diet and the frequency of diagnosed heart attacks. Eventually, the authority should pay attention to
such
 evidence and prevent
such
 issues by raising taxes on fast meals, and,
moreover
, promoting a healthy lifestyle using TV, the Internet and other advertisements. Nowadays fast
food
 cafes are increasing in popularity among students due to their considerably cheap prices and availability almost everywhere.
For example
, the McDonalds cafe is represented probably in each big town of any country and, not to mention, taking dinner there is much cheaper than going to some restaurant.
As a result
, a great deal of youngsters every day spends money on greasy products
instead
 of taking in enough amount of vegetables, fruits and other valuable foodstuffs. In conclusion, without the government
this
 problem can not be solved and increasing the tax on junk
food
 will reduce its consumption, and predictably the health issues.
However
, it's just one of the approaches and power agencies have to use the diversity actions, including raising people's awareness.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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