Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets, and groceries is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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It becomes increasingly common these days to do online shopping , and many goods

such

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as clothes , home appliances , and books are being purchased using specialized applications on the internet.

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although

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this

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trend has some disadvantages, I believe it brings about more advantages. On one hand, some people claim that online trading has the drawback of being unsecured and unsafe in terms of the possibility of being a scam or

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the buyer to

money

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theft .

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, many clothes are discovered upon delivery to be of

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bad quality and that they do not match the displayed ones on the advertising website.

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, other people might feel discomfortable buying something without

cheking

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checking

it out physically ,or without fitting it on, as

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is the case when buying a pair of shoes online .

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, products bought

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way might be exposed to damage on

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, and some companies do not offer any insurance for

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accidents which represents a real

lose

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money

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and time.

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this

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fashionable kind of shopping has a lot of edges and

benifits

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benefits

benefit

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, most products displayed online are cheaper than its counterpart at shopping

centers

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, because the retail companies would save a large amount of

money

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that

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would have been paid for the

renatls

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rentals

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, hydro, and the

employees

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wages. And

airplain

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aeroplane

tickests

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tickets

are a prominent example of

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price

differencies

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differences

, where booking an online trip is far less expensive than

to book

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it in person by 30% at the minimum.

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, it is clearly noticed recently that many goods are available on the trading company's website and missing in the retailing shop ,

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the consumer can order them online only.

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, people

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special physical needs find it extremely more convenient and safe to get their daily groceries and

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their bills through

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easy to use

websits'

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websites

rather

tahn

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than

to be exposed to

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apply

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rout hazards. To sum up,

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online shopping has the cons of being risky in terms of product's quality

uncertainity

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uncertainty

and online transaction security, the advantages of getting

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cheaper stuff and

to save

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money

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are largely

outweight

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outweigh

outweighed

those drawbacks. And I reckon that in

short

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period of time the majority of

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the consumer

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consumer

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consumers

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will shift to online shopping.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

382 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

convenience
time-saving
wide selection
competitive prices
discounts
accessibility
global marketplace
availability
fraud
scams
lack of
physical interaction
personal experience
impersonal
customer service
delays
delivery
return process

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