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People in big cities are facing many health challenges due to a higher level of air pollution. What causes the air pollution in big cities? Can you suggest some ways to deal with this situation?

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 era, everything is growing fast including
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 and that leads to many major health issues. Nowadays, the main problem in towns is the
pollution
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 which can be in any format like
air
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 or noise. In the following
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 we will shed
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some light on
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the causes
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 of
air
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pollution
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 as well as describe some
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 to control the situation. To commence with, the main reason
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 bad
air
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 quality is the vehicles. To explain it, in big
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 everyone owes private cars to travel. So, there are too many vehicles on the roads
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 produce
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carbon dioxide. Which is very harmful to humans.
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, the airlines are raising the
pollution
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 to
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 level.
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 study of Canada shows that the airline from China to America produce 300 tones of carbon dioxide. Which appears in
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 of
pollution
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 in the sky.
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, it puts
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 impact on human lives.
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another cause is
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. To illustrate it,
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the
 big
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 have many
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 to run the city. These
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 are still using
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fossil fuels which is very dangerous for humans.
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,
air
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 quality is getting worse off each and every day.
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,it is essential to take
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 legal steps by respective country leaders.
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, the government cannot oversee or control
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 of all individuals,
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 responsibility of every individual to follow rules and act jointly with authorities to control atmospheric
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.
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, the government can introduce
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schemes to use
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public transport. So that people in the
cities
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 use only public transport. It reduces the
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pollution
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 as well as the traffic on the roads
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 people can save their time.
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,
government
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the government
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 can limit the time for
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factories
factory
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 can limit the
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 of
factories
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 in every area of
cities
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. In conclusion,
air
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pollution
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 is the one of
biggest
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problem
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problems
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of
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worldwide. I would like to reiterate that while legal regulations to reduce
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pollution
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 are much necessary for the sake of human and mother nature, I believe that every person should
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 participate in governments' actions.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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