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It’s time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye.To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

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Nowadays, Social
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 has become a fundamental communication for
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 all over the world. Due to the rapid development of technology, almost all populations are got access to connect to social
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 whether what ages are they and several companies
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 as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter and many more are capturing the network commercial.
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, there are several arguments suppose that Social
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 has lots of significant disadvantages
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 Its advantages, which we cannot deny, particularly, they analyzed that Social
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 is playing a role in the change of
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 as well as affect directly on
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's thinking, whether you are aware of some dangerous can happen, they still unexpectedly occur on you.
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, we have to actively realize that Social
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 is a place, where lots of information on the world are combined and those are not probably credible,
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 may cause confusion for users,
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, could you image consequences if
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 willingly rely on unreal information unconsciously,
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 caused several popular swindles, and we call them as network insider. Definitely, Social
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 offered a lot of opportunities to build our self-image,
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 a strategy for
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's businesses,
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, many
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 use Social
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 as their
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 life, their feeling, emotion or anything about them are actively expressed, It's a
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 because they are addicted in sharing their information in order to receive attention, It's may not bring them any values,
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, dangers from unidentified guys can occur to them. In short, Social
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 has various disadvantages as well as advantages, but we cannot make sure when will unfortunates happen, the best way is
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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