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It’s time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye.To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

#it’s #time #ban #media #life #people #world #politics #self-image #spread #disinformation #experiment #goodbye
People
 all around the world are affected by the development of technology and the
use
 of social networks. It's time to ban the
use
 of social
media
 for the purpose of carrying out terrible acts that have a negative impact on others' lives. I completely agree with
this
contents
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.
Firstly
 , we have no control over
content
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 on social
media
,
such
 as misleading
information
 about famous
people
 or
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some things
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somethings
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 . When some insiders of showbiz or
anti fan
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 don't like them, they are willing to spend money to fabricate false
information
 and put it on social
media
, causing their identity and profession to be harmed.
Second
,
in addition
 to spreading incorrect
information
, bad
people
use
 social
media
 to sabotage other
people
's life and family by posting sensitive photographs and videos,
such
 as flirting with or seducing young girls and
woman
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women
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.
then
 they
use
there
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their
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 images or videos to blackmail and force the victim to serve their depraved actions. ly, due to the country's politics, there have been numerous video clips recently highlighting the struggle between Vietnam and China in the Westen Ocean.
This
 has an impact on the relationship between the two countries.
For example
, on October 12th, 2021, China launches
rocket
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 to attack the Vietnamese border.
Moreover
, there has
also
 the addiction to technology or social
media
 generates a slew of problems for
people
, including distractions on
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 , work that delays growth, and spending too much time on social
media
 and neglecting family and friends
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 them. To sum up, I acknowledge that social
media
 provide us with benefits
such
 as saving money while always having up-to-date
information
, as well as quick and convenient transactions;
however
, I agree with the statement that it is time to ban the internet society because many bad
people
 have abused it for personal gain to influence politics, spread misinformation, and stunt children's development.
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