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It’s time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye.To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

#it’s #time #ban #media #life #people #world #politics #self-image #spread #disinformation #experiment #goodbye
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People
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 all around the world are affected by the development of technology and the
use
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 of social networks. It's time to ban the
use
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 of social
media
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 for the purpose of carrying out terrible acts that have a negative impact on others' lives. I completely agree with
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contents
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.
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 , we have no control over
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 on social
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,
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 as misleading
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 about famous
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 or
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some things
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somethings
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 . When some insiders of showbiz or
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 don't like them, they are willing to spend money to fabricate false
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 and put it on social
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, causing their identity and profession to be harmed.
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 to spreading incorrect
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, bad
people
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use
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 social
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 to sabotage other
people
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's life and family by posting sensitive photographs and videos,
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 as flirting with or seducing young girls and
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.
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 they
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 images or videos to blackmail and force the victim to serve their depraved actions. ly, due to the country's politics, there have been numerous video clips recently highlighting the struggle between Vietnam and China in the Westen Ocean.
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 has an impact on the relationship between the two countries.
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, on October 12th, 2021, China launches
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 to attack the Vietnamese border.
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, there has
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 the addiction to technology or social
media
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 generates a slew of problems for
people
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, including distractions on
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 , work that delays growth, and spending too much time on social
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 and neglecting family and friends
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 them. To sum up, I acknowledge that social
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 provide us with benefits
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 as saving money while always having up-to-date
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, as well as quick and convenient transactions;
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, I agree with the statement that it is time to ban the internet society because many bad
people
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 have abused it for personal gain to influence politics, spread misinformation, and stunt children's development.
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