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It is generally accepted that exercise is good for children and teenagers.Therefore physical education and sports should be compulsory for all student in all schools. What do you think?

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Introduction
Physical exercise could play important role in
children
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 lives nowadays. In
this
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 my point of view that
sports
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 activities should be compulsory at schools in order to release the stress of the students and help them to establish a healthy lifestyle.
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 ,it may
leads
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 to bullyingò.
Body paragraph 1
Exercise ,
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 with ,reduces the level of stress and help
children
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 to be mentally strong. If
sports
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 are mandatory in school ,more and more teenagers will be healthy. In Bulgaria ,
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 ,
which
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 gymnastics is a compulsory lesson in all schools ,students are more healthy and happy than
other
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 countries in which physical exercise is not
in
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in-school
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school
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the school
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 programme.
Body paragraph 2
Mandatory physical education for
children
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 at
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 age ,
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 is important because it has as a consequence to learn the important benefits of good habits in order to develop a healthy lifestyle. Adolescences ,
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, who learn from
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 age to play sport , usually develop a generally healthy lifestyle,like healthy food options and habits.
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Some
children
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 ,
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, are not interested in
sports
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 and that has a result
some
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 of their classmates
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 at them or
to bully
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 them. An example
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this
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 is that some boys laugh at others because they do not have
talent
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a talent
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 for
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.
Conclusion
In summary, I strongly believe that physical education should be mandatory at schools in order for
children
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 to establish good habits in their lives and be mentally strong.
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 , sometimes that could be lead some students to harmful behaviours against their classmates.

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