Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Climate change has always been an important issue
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all over the world. In that concept, multiple environmental problems emerge as a warning caution to humankind.
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, numerous people argue that the extinction of some floral and animal species should be mostly prioritized; others,
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more serious problems in
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scenario. My essay will explain both mentioned sides, followed by my personal idea. On the one hand, the vanishment of multiple species has been an urgent consequence for bad adverse of climate change.
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, nowadays polar bears are on the verge of extinction which rings an alarm to humankind on global protection. Since each
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scontributes
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, one broken point would lead to
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destruction of all other kinds.
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all sorts of plants and animals in order to prevent the alarming vanishment. On the other
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, people nowadays are facing
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much more serious troubles caused by environmental destruction. To illustrate, covid_19 pandemic is
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severe disaster
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, causing
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of millions of individuals, which never happens
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tiny virus has been working as an enormous bell to the world that indicates one of the terrible
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for human
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if activities to protect
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are not
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boosted early to avoid ancient virus release from permanent
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or unexpected
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of harmful species.
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, the argument of serious environmental activists is totally reasonable. In my perspective,
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of some plants and animals is an undeniable trouble, people must prepare for more severe global disasters which could cause humankind extinction in
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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