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To alive traffic problems, the government should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

#traffic #government #tax #car #owners #money #transportation
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The government should deal with the traffic jam by
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 the
people
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 with a strong policy and
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 an improvement in
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vehicle
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, so the environment
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well
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look
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 cleaner and healthier than seemed before .On
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hands
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, humans can suffer from
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delay during
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traveling
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 via bus or train.
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 of all, nowadays
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a lot
 of cars driven
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 the roads that increased the air pollution
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 the earth.
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 may make the plante not
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suitable
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private care with public
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transport
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 will lead to
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clean
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communities
that is
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sutable
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suitable
 for both human beings and animals. To illustrate that we can see the difference between a place
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 is
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full of fumes and CO2 and a place with
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fresh air and
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the
posibilities
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possibilities
 of having a good life.
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, many
people
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 who use public sectors of transportation have
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 from their work and their boss get
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angry
 because they did
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 reach on the time. The
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 that it
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people
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 from different areas and some of them called the driver to waite
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. The governments think that they solve the
proplem
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problem
 with traffic but in
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 they lead to
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huge difficulties
to
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 the employee and many other
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. A good example of
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 is my friend who lived in
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 and the
manegar
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manager
manner
 of their company cut their waves because they reach very late. In conclusion , some decision from governments to solve the traffic has
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affect
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 on
environment
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the environment
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 while it
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 the
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problem
 overlooked and hard to act with truly.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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