Once children start school, teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development. Do you agree or disagree?

Schooling is
important
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part of a
child
's life and it
molds
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the
child
to become a man. I agree
with
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that tutors have a great impact on their students physically and publically. The duties of
teacher
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is
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neither few nor small, but they elevate the mind and
shapen
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shape
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the character.
Firstly
, the main reason behind
this
is because
little
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one has working parents. They even can't prepare their offspring for
school
and check their daily routine after
school
. Whereas, the teachers attending them in
school
are kindhearted and loving. They
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as a role model for learners and they try to follow them. In
this
way, the leadership of
tutor
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comes into play.
Forexample
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For example
, there are 2 teachers to 10
student
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in kindergarten.
Moreover
, more than half of families have both parents on daily wages.
Secondly
, when a
child
is born parents set their
amibition
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ambition
ambitions
high.
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result
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of
this
, when children join the
school
spend most of their time in it.
Moreover
, there are numerous academies playing their role in
achieveing
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achieving
child's
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a child's
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goal
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. So, the more time you spend in a place influences you the most.
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For example
, a sociologist performed an experiment in which he places one
child
in
solaritary
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solitary
and
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other
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another
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in
open
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the open
an open
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world.
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of
this
experiment was that the
child
in
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open
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world has more social skills
then
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the other one. Bringing
this
to an end,
teacher
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the teacher
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is
ones
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spiritual
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father. So, when
a
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children start schooling teachers play
inevitable
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an inevitable
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role in their nourishing rather its social or mental skills.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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