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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, tourism across the border has been booming and generating the largest
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 in the industry.
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, most people believe that excursion brings fear and unrest
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 of cooperation among different
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. I strongly disagree with
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 opinion because international excursion creates awareness and
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 for host
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. Globetrotting creates awareness and exposure for foreign travellers because of the entertaining facilities in the host nation.
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, millions of foreign nationals visit Dubai and gain an understanding of the emirate culture, food and the beautiful sereny buildings
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 as the Dubai shopping mall. There has not been any negative news about security threats rather, the number of tourists has been soaring yearly for the past decades.
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, International explorations is a good source of
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 generation for most nations. Immigrants are checked at the borders by military personnel for any harmful devices.
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, the Australian airport has several surveillance machines and border control policies.
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,
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 eliminates the fear amongst the nations.
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, tourism in a foreign land may be a concern for some
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 whose borders are porous and lack security techniques and equipment but the advantages outweigh the threats if properly managed by concerned nations and their citizens
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 as due diligence measures, border protection exercises and registration of foreign trotters. In conclusion,
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 benefit from international tourism and generate
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 from tourists who come around to explore the
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' beautiful facilities. I totally concur that foreign vacations should not be an issue for
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 but an enjoyable bilateral relationship and opportunities.
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