Recent research suggests that the majority of criminals who are sent to prison commit crimes after they are released. Why is this the case? What can be done to solve this problem?
Different studies say that when inmates go out of jail, they again do some crimes.
This
may be because there are no laws or social programs to change their behaviour of
. In my opinion, the government ought to create laws and invest money in Change preposition
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this
problem.
Firstly
, some think that criminals
that go out of prison commit crimes again because the
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life
in jail is really different to real life
and the inmates spent a lot of time
without doing anything. Also
, world life
can change while time
runs for the prisoners. Furthermore
, governments do not invest money in creating different programs to change the mind of criminals
. For instance
, in Chile
there are few prisoners that want to improve their social skills and Add a comma
,Chile
this
can be influenced by the bad politics that we have.
Secondly
, with regards to the main problem, governments can create a different job into
the prison, Change preposition
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this
can be positive for criminals
because they could spend time
learning some work as consequently
when people get out the jail they could reintegrate to
the society and contribute to the nation without they are discriminate for the people. Change preposition
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For instance
, a good job or activity that prisoners may do is ending their scholarship or learning to work with wood.
In conclusion, there are some facts that can influence the life
of criminals
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,
but is important that governments take control of the opportunity Remove the comma
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time
before prisoner
leave the jails. Fix the agreement mistake
prisoners
This
may give positive benefits for the
society.Correct article usage
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