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Some people feel unsafe when they are in public and at home. What are the possible causes for this and what are some possible solutions?

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The dangers of living in
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 century can make some people feel not protected in their household or among others. It can be caused by several reasons as if violence or traumatic experiences. The ones who suffered from some kind of traumatic situation, especially caused by violence tend to feel unsafe in all sorts of situations. The pain and suffering caused by
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 experience can be a decisive factor when it comes to peace of mind. There is no doubt that individuals have a hard time getting theirs lives together after being victims of the violence. One other way to look at
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 fear is by thinking of all the issues that are shown on television, which make the feeling way more understandable. The feeling of unsafety is present because they don't know what to expect when they leave their houses, but
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 don't know what can happen inside their home. Everyone wants and deserves to live in a safe space.
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 why people should always be in touch with the truly responsible for
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 matter, the Government. They need to make sure that their voices are being heard and express their wishes to make a better society. A lot of things can be done,
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, more police help in the neighbourhoods, more lights in the streets and more commitment from the authorities to help individuals with post-traumatic experiences, giving support and medical assistance for everyone who needs them. That being said, I believe the Government is responsible for the safety of its community. If the population doesn't feel safe inside their houses or in public, there is no way to make them feel safer if the governors do not put any effort into making
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 come true. Safety is one of the most important matters for society, and people need to feel safe in their own homes or among others.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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