The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of areas such as fashion and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

It is considered by many that vogue
industry
and sales of different
products
may
influences
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the capacity to
people
to try to be same each other and I agree.
Instead
of buying different
products
,
people
many times
to
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prefer
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buy the most popular
products
to stay fashionable.
Firstly
, many
people
are influenced by the vogue
industry
because these
business
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try to sell the same product
with
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to
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an important or famous person. In fact, especially youths
wants
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to
imitated
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imitate
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either the clothes or some cars to demonstrate another status,
this
can be
afect
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affect
in the behaviour and encourage to
people
to obtain the same
products
to another person.
For example
in Chile, if a futbolist in
a
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advertisement
appear
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with special sneakers, many mas want to be like him buying the same
products
.
Secondly
, the capacity to copy each other is a natural behaviour of human beings, because we need to survive social pressure and
this
is an important factor in their acts.
In addition
, the fashion
industry
sales
is
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are
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created to
people
copy the different models either their clothes or anything that
their
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they're
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dressed like pieces of
jewelry
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jewellery
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.
Besides
,
this
show as
people
want to imitate the models because
this
business is one the biggest in the world earning a lot of money. I can say that the base of
this
industry
is to encourage
people
to buy the same
products
. In conclusion, the capacity of
the
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human beings to copy each other is a natural behaviour and I agree. I could say that in the vogue
industry
we can see
that is
a good example because their sales are extremely high.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • conform
  • social norms
  • evolutionary psychology
  • survival
  • advertising
  • influencer marketing
  • celebrity endorsements
  • trends
  • followers
  • psychological comfort
  • social ostracism
  • mass production
  • high-end fashion
  • uniformity
  • cultural homogenization
  • globalization
  • media
  • spread
  • affordable
  • imitate
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