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the international tourist arrivals in five various parts of the world in four different years with five years intervals,starting from 1990.

The given line graph illustrates the information about the international tourist arrivals in five various parts of the world in four different
years
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 with five
years
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 intervals,starting from 1990. The general overview here is that North
America
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 was the most of the number of tourist arrivals. According to the graph, it can be seen that the tourist arrivals in Northern
America
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 at around 70
billion
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 people, While Central and Eastern European indicated 30
billion
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 people.
Although
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 the number of the population arrived in Norther
America
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 rose a gradually to 90
billion
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 in 2000, but its numbers dropped slightly to under 90
billion
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 in 2000. Central and Eastern Europe and South-East Asia,
on the other hand
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, its figures grew dramatically to over 80
billion
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 and approximately 50
billion
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 after passing 15
years
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.
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, Sub-Saharan Africa and South
America
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 shared the same figure at under 10
billion
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 of the population arrived in 1990. 15
years
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 later, there was an upward trend in both countries which accounted for 20
billion
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 and approximately 18
billion
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.

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