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People in big cities are facing many healthy challenges due to a high level of air pollution. What cause air pollution in big cities? Can you suggest some ways to deal with this situation?

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The pie charts give information regarding the proportion of nutrient types including
Sodium
, Saturated fat and added sugar are contained in meals in the United States. In order to remain good health, it has to balance between three substances From a general perspective,
breakfast
 is the lowest rate with having three types of nutrients while evening meal contains higher these substances than other meal, relatively. Looking at the charts, there are obvious immediately that dinner meal possesses a great deal of
Sodium
 and Saturate fat which accounts for 43% and 37%, respectively. Followed by lunchtime, the percentage of
Sodium
 and Saturated fat is ranked
second
 place, with 29% and 26%.
However
, the snack and
breakfast
 time is the same level at 14% in
Sodium
 rate. In terms of Saturated fat, the snack has more nutrients than
breakfast
, with 21 % and 16%, respectively. It is striking that the snack contains much more added sugar than the others. It takes up 42% which nearly doubles the evening meals, at 23%. The lunch and
breakfast
 contribute to lower the percentage of added sugar, just 19% and 16%
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