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Many people today use their phones for sending texts more than talking. What are the reasons for this? are there more advantages than disadvatages ?

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Nowadays,
people
 are using mobile
phones
 more than they intend to use.
Initially
, they are invented for the purpose of calling only.
However
, due to advancement of the technology, there are
plethora
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 of features available in mobile
phones
 these days.
Hence
, many
people
 are using their
phones
 for chatting
instead
 of talking. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the reasons for
this
 and both the merits and the demerits associated with
this
 issue. It is already known that
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due to advancement of the cutting edge technology, the
number
 of
people
 using
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mobile
phones
 and the
number
 of features available in those
phones
 are proliferating.
Firstly
, due to
this
the
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competition, more and more
number of
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applications
 are being created for
the
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mobile
phones
.
Thereafter
, resulting in providing more options to the users.
Hence
,
people
 have many options
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typical phone-calling. So,
people
 are growing eager to try their hands-on different texting
applications
. On the
one
 hand,
this
 might help in the development of new
applications
 which might help
people
 in various aspects.
For instance
, consider Whatsapp, since
it's
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introduction
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 the
number
 of
people
 using
this
 application increased rapidly, now there are almost 1 billion active users of
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
Whatsapp
 across the globe. So, the developers are constantly trying to add new and helpful features
such
 as UPI payments through them.
Secondly
, with the help of
texts
,
one
 can easily send the message he/she
want
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 to convey to others at
anytime
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.
Texts
 are a faster means of communication too.
Instead
 of talking over minor issues,
one
 can send
texts
instead
, thereby finding a way to save time and pass over the message quickly.
On the other hand
, there are certain drawbacks associated with
this
 trend.
Firstly
,
one
 cannot convey their feelings accurately over a text message.
This
 might result in sabotaging of the relationships.
Secondly
, due to more and more
people
prefering
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preferring
texts
 over calls,
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also
 indirectly improve the cyber-crime rate. As
,
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 hacking of text messaging
applications
 is relatively simpler than that of telecommunication.
As a result
, many attacks like masquerading, modification of messages might take place through excessive usage of texting
applications
, as they are mostly
internet based
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applications
. To recapitulate,
this
 trend of preferring
texts
 over talking is debatable. Though
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 there are contentious arguments opposing
this
, I regard
this
 as a positive sign, as there are greater advantages to
this
 and convincingly the advantages of
this
 trend are outweighing the disadvantages associated.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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