Q. There is the annual work party next month, which is held every year. Write a letter to your colleagues to co-arrange the party. In your letter: • Say what would you do differently than last year • Say what you think were some of the things not so good last year • Suggest where to meet to plan for the party.
Dear colleagues,
I am writing
this
letter in connection with our annual work effort party
which is happening next month on the 23rd of July. As the facilitator of the party
this
year, I would like to bring to everyone's attention that there will be some changes in the plan which will be different from previous years.
First of all, I would like to start with what's new we can do to make the party
more engaging and entertaining. I have got an idea of doing a potluck this
year rather than catering from the fast food restaurants. For instance
, as all of us have our own cultural background, we can bring the cuisines of our home country. This
will provide us an
opportunity to explore a variety of dishes from different nations and promote inclusivity.
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with an
Secondly
, some of the foods like salads and pizza were untouched and wasted last
year. I wouldn't say it wasn't delicious but it was quite basic dishes which we could have on a regular basis. While
we are on
the page, let's discuss together what would be the best substitute for these foods.
Lastly
, as for the meeting place to prepare for the party
. I am thinking of inviting everybody to my house. I have a huge backyard with pool
and a beautiful patio. I would like to offer my backyard to hold our work Correct article usage
a pool
party
if all of you agrees
on that.
I look forward to meeting everybody soon.
Yours sincerely
Sandhya Thapa MagarCorrect subject-verb agreement
agree
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea and avoid fragmentation. For instance, the paragraph about new activities transitioned into the issues from last year; it would be clearer divided into separate paragraphs.
task achievement
Double-check for minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'what's new we can do' should be 'what new things we can do'.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear opening, body, and closing that follow a logical structure, making it easy to understand.
task achievement
The tone is friendly and appropriately formal, which is suitable for writing to colleagues about organizing a party.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.