Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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. Gaining
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power but
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responsibility. Many people would think that sharing everything will cause
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benefit but in my opinion, I believe that
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share
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only for the aspect that will not harm others Accessing
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information
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easily lead to
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next
step of development especially in
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science
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knowledge. Knowing the previous discoveries or any available data can help all researchers achieve their goal more possibly.
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,
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information
is too invaluable to be used as
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commercial competition.
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, an inventor of a
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that was used to protect the passenger in
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car
,
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had shared his invention, so that every other company can use
this
equipment freely. And that can
benefits
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people all over the world.
However
, not every type of
information
should be shared freely. Some kind of
information
can cause more trouble if it
was openly access
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. Many
information
is too important or too dangerous. Obviously, the
information
of the
bomb making
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that can access from the internet causing countless chaos from a hand- made grenade. In conclusion, sharing
information
can enhance the world but
also
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at the same time. I strongly believe that
information
should
be carefully share
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, not all
information
should be free to access for everyone
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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