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Children should never be educated by parents at home. Do you agree?

#children #parents #home
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For starters, some
people
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 think it is not good for
children
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 if
parents
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 are involved in their education. Because they think that
parents
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 do not have enough skills to be teachers by profession and do not know how to teach
children
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. The teacher can give more to the students because he has the skills.
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, they think differently,
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parents
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 try to pass on the knowledge to their
children
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 that will be useful to them in the future.
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, there are negative aspects in a
child
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's life if
parents
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 try to teach their
child
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 something
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 not in their best interest.
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 why
parents
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 should not teach their
children
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.
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, some
people
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 believe that
parents
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 play a major role in
children
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's lives. If they give them some knowledge and information that will help them in life.
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, a
child
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 who is educated by his
parents
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 will always have good discipline and behave politely in front of
people
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.
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, they will be aware of the bad habits that they should not do
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 as quarrels, fights, robberies and so on.
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, the positive aspects show us that
parents
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 are a mandatory part of
children
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's lives, even if it means educating their
children
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. In conclusion,
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 some
people
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 think that
children
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 should not be educated by their
parents
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, I think they are the ones who play an important role in developing their
behavior
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behaviour
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 and teaching them to be good
people
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, but
this
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 education is part of
from
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apply
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the
child
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's life every day, so in my
opinion
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children
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 should go to school to develop in a social environment with other
children
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 and
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 practice what they have learned at home.
Parents
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 must be present to help their
children
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 become what they are, but teachers are the ones who will not only give them their knowledge but
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 become like their
second
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parents
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 will teach and love them as their own
children
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.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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