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Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #road #safety #age #cars #motorbikes
Among various issues of an economy, leaping
road
accidents
is
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 becoming a major concern for every nation. Experts panel strongly opine that majority of youth do not abide the existing laws laid by governing authorities and
hence
, there should be a hike in existing legal age of driving.
This
 essay will throw some light in support of
aforesaid
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 statement.
Firstly
, the following stanzas will describe the significance of
road
safety
 awareness and
consequences
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the consequences
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 of their non-adherence;
subsequently
, it will describe how the number of
accidents
 can be reduced by following a radical approach of driving. Awareness of
road
safety
 measures and their adherence holds a significant role in ensuring
a
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safe driving. As a matter
fact
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, nowadays, every nation is concerned about leaping
road
accidents
. As per the report revealed in
daily
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 national newspaper, ‘Economic
Times’
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, it was observed that majority of
accidents
 happened due to heavy traffic and non-adherence of traffic guidelines. Every individual is passionate to ride their dream vehicle post attaining their teenage as which seems to be
a
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 beginning of
new
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 adventurous journey and at times, do not abide the rules and regulations laid by civic authorities. Intermediate riders are not curious to understand
about
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safe and secure driving,
this
 will not only impact their
safety
 but
also
hazardous
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 for other riders.
Likewise
, parents are quite passionate to pamper their wards by gifting them, latest
technology driven
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 motor vehicles.
Increase
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 in the juvenile age for driving will not only bring down the number of vehicles on the
road
 but
also
 create proficient drivers,
in addition
to
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that, it will
also
 reduce unnecessary chaos and traffic jams, which ultimately results in ensuring efficient thinking skills among the riders. In conclusion, everyone’s
safety
 should be the prime responsibility of one individual; considering
this
 mind youth should be allowed to ride any vehicle post proficient training, i.e. after completion of their tertiary education and commencement of professional career as at
this
 stage of life, people are more responsible and concentrated about focused riding skills.
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