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The digital age has made the gap between the younger and older generations wider. Give reasons for your own answer.

The introduction of new technology in terms of digital life has created a vast distance between the young
generation
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 and
older
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the older
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generation
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. The young
ones
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 are more
attractive
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towards
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to
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 the gadgets available in
a
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the
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 market and occupied in using different
apps
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 whereas elder
people
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 are not familiar with
the
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such
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 kinds of technology.
This
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generation
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 gap.
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 with, these days increase in the development of new electronic products draw the attention of younger
people
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 due to which little
ones
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 get more advanced as compared to older
ones
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. Apart from
this
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,
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internet usage is very easy for
young
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the young
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generation
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 whereas elder
people
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 are not so much able to access the internet.
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, the gadgets available are
of
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so much tricky to use that older
generation
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people
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 are not able to handle, and so they remain somewhere unfamiliar with the use.
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, new product
launch
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launches
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such
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 as mobile phones
are
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 not so easily be used by elders as
it
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they
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 required
password
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passwords
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 and many
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other
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others
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other
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 details
such
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 as gmails or emails which are not easy for them. On the other side, there
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also
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are also
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apps
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 in which young
people
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 are often busy
in
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either making videos or playing games.
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 to
this
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, young
ones
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 are occupied in doing necessary activities which are not accessible by older
ones
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.
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,
older
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the older
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generation
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do
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 not know how to use these
apps
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 as well as they
even
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are even
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 not aware
with
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of
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 the outcome of involving in
such
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, some
apps
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 are introduced in which
young
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the young
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generation
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 makes videos in order to get popularity and posting on social
site
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sites
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 while doing
such
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 activities they shun attention on their elders. To sum up,
young
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the young
a young
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generation
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 is involved in the new gadgets available in
a
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the
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 market and indulge in
apps
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 available
instead
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 of making healthy conversation with elder
people
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 because of
this
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 the
generation
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 gap is created as they are not familiar with
the
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such
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 technology.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital age
  • gap
  • younger generation
  • older generation
  • technological advancements
  • rapid pace of change
  • overwhelming
  • adept
  • digital devices
  • communicate
  • interact
  • resistant
  • knowledge
  • skills
  • reliance
  • divide
  • attitudes
  • privacy
  • online security
  • widening
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