Students should focus on learning in the classroom rather than show their status by wearing fashionable clothes. Therefore all students should wear school uniform. Do you agree or disagree

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. Some people believe that when students wear various
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to compete
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clothes
. As an illustration, parents almost every new study year buy their children
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my perception if parents don't buy it, most of
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students envy others and
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stupid things affect their focus.
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speaking, some people make
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conclusion by recognising the fact that fashionable
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.
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various factors I strongly disagree
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assumption, because I believe that it is an old - fashion idea and if
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has some aims , nothing can impress them.
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wear
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dont
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affect
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can die down their learning. In conclusion,
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uniform
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support that students have to opt
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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