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Public transport is essential but problematic. Describe some of the problems connected to public transport and suggest some solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People’s carrier is a necessity, which
also
have
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 numerous issues.
This
 essay clarifies questions
such
 as over-crowding and not following time;
thereafter
, it will discuss solutions
such
 as shorter
route
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routes
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 and Bus-way for people’s carrier. At
first
,
over crowding
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 issue will be addressed. Due to the population increase and cheap fair are the principal reasons of jam-packed;
therefore
, people’s bus is attractive to everyone.
In addition
,
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the long-route
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long-route
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long route
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 of
these human carrier
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also
 contribute to
the
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complications. Another problem is not following the schedule as there is no regulatory body or hefty fine on these vehicles;
nevertheless
, traffic is
also
 extremely chaotic in nature;
consequently
, the fine may not be fair. On account of congestion,
huge
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the huge
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 working hour is lost in
mega cities
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megacities
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. In Dhaka, Bangladesh,
for instance
, 2 month equivalent of work hours
is
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 lost every year due to congestion, according to the source of the Daily Mail.
In contrast
, one of the solutions of
over-crowding
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 can be solved by reducing long-route and introducing more various sorts of transports, which will assist to eliminate crowding issues in my view.
Although
 planning is required from the authority; how
this
 transformation will happen.
Furthermore
, not following
scheduled
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 time agenda can be addressed by eliminating congestion for
public
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a public
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mover
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, and
this
 can be sorted by creating
bus
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a bus
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 lane where only public
hauler’s
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haulers
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 will run.
For example
,
Bangladesh
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the Bangladesh
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 authority is developing
bus
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a bus
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lane
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lanes
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 to eliminate
grid-lock
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gridlock
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 from the street. In conclusion, crowding and late agendas can be sorted by rearranging routes whereas traffic complications can be sorted by only bus-way in my view.
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  • inequality
  • congestion
  • economic feasibility
  • subsidies
  • infrastructure
  • overcrowding
  • commute
  • incentivize
  • service quality
  • reinvest
  • equitable access
  • fiscal responsibility
  • peak hours
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