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IN SOME COUNTRIES MORE PEOPLE INTERESTINGIN FINDING OUT ABOUT THE HISTORY OF THE HOUSE THEY LIVE IN WHAT ARE THE REASON AND HOW PEOPLE CAN RESERACH THIS ?

#countries #people #interestingin #history #house #reason #reserach
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 in
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countries
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 large groups of people are showing more interest in doing past research of the apartment they currently
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All the aspects would be discussed in the following paragraphs. There are
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 reasons,
firstly
 individuals will come to know about materials used for constructing it. Earlier products
such
 as clay,stone and brick
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 available which was of good qualities,
no
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 impurities at all. Due to
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,
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the building
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building
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 stand high for decades and
still
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 in excellent condition.
Furthermore
, structural methods
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utilise
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 for making.No machines was there in ancient
time
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times
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also
 most of the work was done by the workers very cautiously and perfectly.
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,in India many of the residential houses erected by the
britishers
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 which are strong, good ventilation till now.
On the other hand
, pupils can do
search
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 on the internet to know the past. On the google
website
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 one can get all
informations
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of
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about
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 all historical
residentials
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. To illustrate, the name, year, material,who was the architecture, how many
labourer
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 were required. The other
modes
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 of getting
is
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 in the public library where ancient literature books are available. It
have
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 particular knowledge of old homes. to conclude both the options are
execellent
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excellent
 for knowing it aids us to know about past knowledge how they survive if when there was no advance technology but we can
ger
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get
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 it from other sources online too,
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