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Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Media
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 follow
the
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celebrities
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 everywhere to capture their every moment. Being a
celebrity
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,
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 has its own pros and cons.
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,
paparrazi
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paparazzi
 should let them live their
life
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 privately for certain
ocassions
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occasions
 like personal moments because they are human
being
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beings
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 too. Nowadays,
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media
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the media
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 has the only goal to cover the
celebrity
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's
life
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 to sell their story. Whether
its
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 a
news
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 channel or
the
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social
media
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 platforms,
celebrities
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 are everywhere. From their routine
life
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 to personal
matter
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matters
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 nothing is hidden from the public. As soon as they stepped out of their house
media
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 starts to cover them and published where did they go or who are they meeting and
sometime
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 hyped about their
news
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.
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, if one male actor is seen with another female actress,
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news
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 will go like are they dating? or just
friend
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friends
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?
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, some
celebrities
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, call the
media
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 deliberately about their whereabouts to stay in the
news
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. It is indeed good to be in
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the lime
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lime light
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limelight
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 for their career but being a human they need their moment without being captured
in
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 camera. Being a famous
celebrity
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, people are curious about their
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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, albeit
media
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 sometimes go beyond that. They have no restrictions line and many times
media
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 behave
insensitive
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towrds
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towards
 them. When a family member of a
celebrity
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 dies, they cover and broadcast the
news
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 is okay but they do not let them grieve personally is not okay at all. It's
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media's
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the media's
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 job but ruining someone's personal
life
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 is not the correct way to do one's job.
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media
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 was literally chasing
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princess Diana and how horrible the incident turned out. Before being a public figure they are human and they have feelings too which should be taken care of. In conclusion,
paparazzi
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the paparazzi
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 should always have that fine line between their approach to give the
celebrities
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 a space and privacy to live their
life
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. Being a public figure they do not even ab
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invasion of privacy
  • personal space
  • media scrutiny
  • mental health
  • public figures
  • relentless pursuit
  • legal implications
  • ethical considerations
  • tabloid journalism
  • financial gain
  • public interest
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