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Some countries achieve international success by building specialized facilities to train top athletes instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think it is a positive or negative development？

#countries #success #facilities #train #athletes #sports #development？
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Each country
choses
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chooses
chose
each
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 own
way
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 to be
winner
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 of different
type
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 of games,
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 as regional, or world games. And the Olympic Game is the top of wish where nations would like to attend.
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, to get
gold
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 as
it
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possible, silver and bronze
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also
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 not so
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. There
are
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 two main
direction
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 to reach
that achievements
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. We will try to look
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 of them and make conclusion at the end of
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 passage. On the one hand, support and make all facilities for the best athletes
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it’s look
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 more reasonable due to they
are
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need
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needless
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less
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 resources and time. Top
sportsmen
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 look for their profession more seriously, and no need
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for motivating
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 factors.
Sport
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it’s
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 their all and reason for life. In
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case
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 chances to get good results
higher
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. Nations like the USA, UK and other capitalistic countries chose
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way
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 of developing their
sport
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 in population.
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is
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way shows
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way
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why
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 shows good result in common.
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, it is
big
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 question, where former countries take top athletes if not provide
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 facilities for the wide range of citizens. Because
main
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 supplier of
sportsmen
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 for the competitions is own population. And in
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case
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 building
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sport
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sports
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 infrastructure for each
citizen
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,citizen
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it’s look
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right
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the right
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way
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 of
sport
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 development.
Which
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 is in itself
motivating
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 factor for
sportsmen
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 because more and more will be interesting in
sport
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. But
this
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is take
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 more financial subsidizing to
sport
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 from the government, and
this
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 is main lack of
this
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way
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 of
sport
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 development.
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,
it’s
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 effect indirect to the government development, due to chances that all nation will be healthier, and will bring more benefits. In conclusion, we discuss both sides of
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. Each position has
own
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its own
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 benefits and
lack
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. So spend money to top athletes and increase chances for best result or finance
wide
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 range of people and select best
sportsmen
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 depend
of
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on
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 county political view.
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