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the alterations of the district park from 2004 to 2014.

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The given maps illustrate the alterations of the district
park
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 from 2004 to 2014. The general overview here is that the
park
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 undergoes a noticeable transformation after passing ten years. According to the
first
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 map, it can be seen that the access located to the northwest tip of the
park
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, with the football pitch in the centre, there was a tennis court to the north with
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 to below it was a children’s play space and on the south of ,it there was a big green space along with the pond beside it. And the car
park
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 was located on the right side of the entrance. Ten years later, the football ground located in the centre of the
park
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 remain unaffected, while the location of the tennis court was unchanged but its size expanded, as does the children’s play space,albeit with children soft play zone.
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, the green zone was reduced in its size to make way for a toilet and a cafe to the north.
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, the pond has been turned into a boating zone with a new picnic area beside it.
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, a cycling path was conducted around the
park
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 edge.
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