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It is more important to have a good family than to have good friends. Family can always compensate for absence of friendship To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In today's fast-moving world, everyone is busy in their lives and want to excel in their careers and in businesses. But it is often a subject of discussion in many social groups that a good family is more significant than good
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. I agree with the notion and in the forthcoming paragraphs, I Shall give reasons why family can be more crucial than colleagues. To embark on, Families are an integral part of one's
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 and they are precious pearls with unconditional love and cooperation. They not only give them required financial support for their education and medical expenses but
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 give them moral support and cooperation in times of crisis than good
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, who are mere spectators. While kind-hearted peers can be helping hands in times of need.
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, their love and affection are limited and Conditional, expect something in return.
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, my friend helped me with monetary assistance for getting admitted to a higher educational institute, in ,return he anticipated that I will
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 help him in matters of financial help. In families especially fathers and mothers are , who know their children more than anyone else, as they have walked all the way through the journey of
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 and always stood and supported them in issues of achievement and failures.
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, if an offspring want to set up a business,
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 he asks for suggestion and assistance from their parents, who eventually provide them with the resources and funds to start operations.
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, I conclude that families are more important and can compensate for the
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 in
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 because parents are the
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 of them in their
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secondly
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 they are father and mother,
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