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Men and women can never share the same responsibilities at home and in everyday life. Do you agree or disagree?

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Gender discrimination is the main dividend in
this
 fast-paced world.
Men
 have their influence at home and women play their part. So, I tend to disagree with
this
 that their authorities at residence are way different from each other. The
first
 point of view is that women are responsible for child care for thousands of years. And female should not devote their life to baby nourishment. As to have family or offspring is both father and mother decision so
men
 should
also
 play part in the development of their child. The nature of a mother is kind and loving but the father should mould his character into caring and love-giving.
As a result
 of
this
 half of the parent's problem vanishes about the development of the child.
For example
, In Pakistan, there are now nannies and children play areas in major companies where the number of
men
 dominates females and it is because the
men
 take responsibility to raise their little one together. Adding on to
this
 is that now in every department of life equality is being implemented. To remove
this
 gender discrimination every company is hiring an equal percentage of the employee. As females are getting more seats rather it’s in doctorate or engineering. As the world is going at a rapid pace for modernity so it’s not like the nineteenth century when ladies are not given chances or allowed to work alongside gentlemen. So, both genders are going through the same responsibilities.
For example
, in the tech-company of Punjab, there are more ratio of women rather than
men
. Bringing
this
 to an end, I reiterate that both male and female have their impact at home and majorly it’s the same duty performed by them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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